Let's dive right in with our heads front first We can find out who gets hurt the most And I'm just fine with your tragic backstory It's not like mine wouldnt cause a little worry
everyone I tell says run like hell But you're the best thing I've ever found
(Chourus)You know you are such a beautiful disaster And I'm not quite sure if you want an ever after but please just know You're the only reason I stick around. Nothing else Is here in this one horse ghost town.
I love hearing all your stupid stories And you still smile even when I'm boring Do you want flowers I don't know I'm doubtful Do you like cliche words cause I've got mouthfuls
Everyone I tell says run like hell but you're the best thing I've ever found.
I'm heavily influenced by that kind of music. I listen to almost everything but despise newer music for the most part and have reverted to the emo pop punk era. Litteraly everything on the radio is electronic now. The music. The vocals heavily edited. the lyrics are even more grade school than mine..
Xavier Allen
Are you writing this to a 15 yo? Geez
Gavin Miller
Please please please look up some books or guides or scholarly articles on prose, do your research on the arts. Natural born talent is not real, nobody comes out the womb talented, they had resources and worked and learned on how to become artists.
Maybe if it was Chains, gangs fangs SCOO SCOO 12 year olds, give me brain SCOo Scoo Looken like a doodle bear Take so much xan I dont care SCOO SCOO
Hudson Fisher
My man, you're either 12 or you're writing to a 12 year old.
I get that you're trying to be emo and that's fine, but this is just too cliche and very extra.
As a song though, whether it's good depends largely on Melody and delivery, plenty of shit lyrics have been good songs.
Juan Myers
Can you give me an example of deep song lyrics you like?
Ethan Adams
This isn’t too bad. It’s very personal to you obviously. I’d only make a few minor changes
Cut out the ‘front’ in the first line, its sort of ugly to read. I’d try rhyming hurt with first in the first verse as well. And cut out the ‘words’ after cliche. We already know it’s verbal cliches when mouthfuls is read. I think that will help it flow a little easier.
Yeah it's not done yet, unless i fill in a. Bunch of instrumental stuff and flow it slowly. Writing is hard af sometimes and something catchy might come to you but then you just go blank with anything followup