Have you ever written a song or attempted to write a song Jow Forums? Even a silly attempt in childhood...

I wrote a song about genociding various groups

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Well when i say formulaic I just mean in style not in content. They tended to be about idk anything, I always like writing about concepts or interesting ideas of experiences but they always feel shallow. idk I can post one or two if you qant but they're pretty cringe comp worthy (especially without any music lol)

I wrote a song in high school that was recorded by a local artist. "Peg Leg Blues". There are several songs with that title, it turns out. Mine is one of them.

lole post 'em, dude. We won't be too harsh I promise.

theyre never really about anything in particular. when i'm sleep deprived i just write whatever comes to my head. unfortunately i can't sing for shit so i can never actually do anything with them; but eh, it's fun anyway.
ah yeah, same thing happens to me. coming up with a melody and rhythm first seems to help
never used LMMS. they are very intimidating but once you learn the workflow they become a lot easier to navigate.

I made a rap single, posted it on YouTube and shared it around in senior year.

whatever you're comfortable sharing desu. If you feel weird sharing anything then don't feel pressured.
I always found songwriting kinda odd where people from all walks of like give a go at it. And no matter how it ends up it's cool to hear people's creativity taking shape.
Can't stress enough no pressure though user. This is a Guatemalan easter egg basket recycling center website anyway

ok lemme see if I can fit it in a comment

ok I'm going to have to split it in two cus I'm a brainlet
City to Stardust (1/2)

Going out for a night drive
Galaxy hangs overhead
Moonlight as my only guide
And the radio man said:
Now accepting applications
Get out of your dreary day-job
Go to space expand the nation
Into the territories of God

So I quit my job and packed my bags
I'm a spaceman now
The travel agency put me in
I'm driving the space highway now

And the comets pass by overhead!
As I look on in awe
Solar systems and quasar clouds!
I'm heading for them now
Now
Now
Now now now

City to Stardust (2/2)

Traveling at light, no speed limits
The road is unmarked
Instead of gravel the path is made of stardust
Traveling at sound, no speed limits
Celestial bodies shine bright
In the outer reaches of my new home: stardust

And the meteors pass by underfoot!
As I look on with joy
The city blocks I used to walk
Can't hold a candle now
Now
Now
Now now now

I take a rest from the daily flight
To the dormitory bay I go
But as I fall asleep I dream a dream
That only astronauts know
Of the stars and the sun flying across the sky
Of the world we left behi - i - ind
Of the beauty of the universe at large
And one thought stayed on my mind -

From city to stardust
I've traveled far
Now nothing can stop us
And we travel the universe now
Now
Now
Now now now

yeh, played in a band in high school. bunch of power violence/hardcore garbage.

I really liked it user!
Not sure if you are instrumentally musical as well, but no matter what I'd say stick to music. Even if it's just a pastime I thought these lyrics were great.

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god i hate /bant. weeb

That's not bad actually. What type of instrumentation were you planning to put to it?

before eveyone decides to hate me btw, i didnt say the lyrics were bad. i said i hated /bant and that this dude is a fucking weeb

Um thanks, it was probably the best I had though. I'm not really musically talented, just a little verbose. But thank you, I really wasn't expecting it to be any good. I actually found another one I liked, you wanna hear it? (I never finished it but it still seems alright)

I honestly don't remember much, it was a couple years ago I wrote it. Maybe 80's synths?

the biggest problem with it is that i cant really think of a way that you could musically time and construct this. in the lyrics like "Traveling at light, no speed limits," it leads you to believe that the next line will be similar in length as most songs are. but its not. and it doesnt sit quite right.

wait do my lyrics sound weeby?

no i was just being an ass theyre not that bad

I was thinking that part might have been intended to be slow and almost just talking over calmer music

Ok, thanks.

Yo I was actually thinking something synth-poppy would go nicely while I was reading it. If you ever end up making a song out of it you should go with that.

You're welcome! As for the next song certainly if you feel comfortable sharing then sure!
Although tbqhwy I may fall asleep as I'm reading this thread in my bed right now and may doze off due to exhaustion from today.
If that happens I will certainly check out Nyafuu tomorrow morning, but I honestly appreciate you sharing some of your work (heck it was the point of the thread right?) and I really did enjoy it

yeah i guess that could work. go through with this dude. try to make it into an actual song. or get a musician or dj or just beat maker to make a good background to it. its not bad

I did write a song once. Was about how I felt towards my ex. Played it on an acoustic guitar, finger picking half of it.

i cant play guitar. only piano

Thanks, user. I doubt I ever will but I appreciate the kind words.

Thanks. You're making me smile 2bh lol. But yeah ok here's a shorter one my next post.

Thanks. Maybe I will. My brother actually does music stuff so maybe I could give him them and he could use them.

this one's untitled

A glance from across a room
Starts a romance atop the moon
Where the players keep playing
The waiting game ashamed
So they glance and blush alone
Having a love affair unknown
In their minds their perfect pair
Is sitting away alone
If only they'd get up and say to eachother

"Hey, I saw you there, and I want to tell you I love the way to stare
And I love the glean of your hair
And the smell you left as you walked by not ten minutes ago
And the way you sat down had my heart set a-pound
So what say you and I get up and go?"

Maybe a spark from the thought
Maybe a look hit its mark
But one of the two whose heart fluttered althrough
Decided to stand up and walk
And the other could only watch
As their love came closer in stride
And found their destination, and said with much pride:

"Hey, I saw you there, and I want to tell you I love the way to stare
And I love the glean of your hair
And the smell you left as you walked by not ten minutes ago
And the way you sat down had my heart set a-pound
So what say you and I get up and go?"

"Hey, I saw you there, and I want to tell you I love the way to stare" to stare or you stare?

these songs are extremely poetic and rhyming. like rap songs.

Sorry, "you stare". typo.

I honestly prefer writing poetry so maybr that's why

Pianos sound a bit more lovely than guitars. Where'd you learn to play?

my entire family is gifted with music and somewhat intelligence. I try not to say much about it bc it can be rude, but yeah my brother and dad who i didnt live with would come over and play and i just picked it up. i play by ear now. and i live with my brother, aunt and uncle now.

im not yet graduated from high school in case anyone is wondering why i live with them still :p

you have to be 18

It's fine fren so long as you're old enough to use the site

also is it ok if I post another song I feel confident rn

wew these sound professional quality desu. good job user

i am an 18 year old senior my boy

Ah. I learned to play guitar in highschool. They were offering a class in the fall semester, so I decided to learn to play (to try to sing to my gf at the time). 1 month into the year, I get dumped. So, I really don't know why I still play desu.

perfectly fine

fuck my life

agreed.

Wow, thanks. I'm not sure that they're "professional" quality but I really appreciate it.

ok I'll send one next post

Waters (1/3) (this is edgier than the other two I posted)

Dessication:
Commiserating condensation
I'm a delightful automaton

Suffering hardships
Is not my style
I'm the one that's got your back

Flowing, like water,
It takes the shape of a flask
Burning, like fire,
It burns and makes me to ash

---

Can you tell me,
The directions,
To Heaven, please?

I can't get there,
Not on my own,
And I'm falling so helplessly!

I'm the rain falling on the car
Of the teen running away - from home
I'm the tears on the face
Of the soldier away - from - HOME

---

I'm the puddle of blood
Under the King's crown
Will the heir step up, please?
Can you save us?
From this flood
And the sky - bursts - forth
And the air is wet
And the God - a - bove
Plays with marionettes

(2/3)

---

Are you up there, God?

Are you up there, God?

Are you up there, God?

Are you up there, God?

---

A child spla-shes in a puddle newly formed;
The rain may fall but her face is not yet worn;
From the sky they fall, tears from the angels,
Like the newly-crowned iron-clad war-pigs!

Why am I so feeble?
To the ground I fall
In the ashes - I - lay,
Mouth agape in awe
And I get choked up
For my mouth is full
Of dead bodies burnt
From this ocean dull -

---

This world is covered
In water, you see,
We are minuscule
In this endless sea
And we set the SKY A - BLAZE,
And the angels call,
"Heed this warning, man:
back to the waters this world - shall - fall."

nah like, legit sounds like something a professional songwriter would make.
at least to me anyway.
keep it up mate

(3/3)
---

Are you up there, God?

Will you please help me?

Are you up there, God?

I'm an automaton,

Are you up there, God?

Waiting to be set free!

Are you up there, God?

I am burnt alive;

Are you up there, God?

Unless you can wash me clean!

Are you up there, God?

With the waters you mould,

Are you up there, God?

From this endless sea!

Thanks user, it really means a lot to me to hear that kind of praise.

ik this one isn't as good but I'm basically picking from the few I didn't delete so idk

Since people are posting their lyrics to their songs, you guys mind if I post my cheesy lyrics?

A song I wrote with my first band in 7th grade. It was called "panic" and was basically a punk song about being a rockstar and how fucking cool we are. It was cringy but we loved it, those guys were my best friends. (I was the drummer btw) I remember the guitarist's mom made us jacket patches for our band with a logo and everything and sewed them on for us and made us pizza as we hung around in his house playing Melee and talking about how famous we were gonna be some day. One of my fondest memories desu

Dude I love those lyrics, sound like it could be some cool indie/shoegaze shit or whatever you want really. Do you want me to help you write some music for it? Or do you already have some recorded?

usually about Artemis

feel free

sounds super comfy you should get back together and write a song about that song

Thanks. I think I'll decline the offer but, like, feel free to experiment with them yourself, not like I have any rights to them now that they're on here.

Also sorry my internet (and even mobile data) cut out for several minutes and it might do it again so idk if I'll be able to stay itt for much longer

Alright thanks user, I might mess around with it for a bit because it's cool but if I'm gonna write I usually prefer to throw in my own lyrics too and build it from the ground up. And I would totally love to get the band back together except the guitarist's parents ended up getting a divorce and he got deported to Canada, weirdly enough so I can't see that happening anytime soon :( maybe someday though

Oh aww, sorry for bringing up something sad. Maybe you could do an e-band or something and stream concerts idk.

Also have fun with it post it on here if you ever make a full song or something

I don't really have a name for this
(Part 1/2)

Hope your day was great
I wasn't there for you
It's the same every day
Know that I still think of you

Autumn has come and pass
Leaves fall everywhere
4 years come and flow
I still can't let you go
I miss you
I need you

Everyday I see your face
Orange hair in the breeze
Now we've grown away
You're just a memory

Autumn has come and pass
Leaves fall everywhere
4 years come and flow
I still can't let you go
I miss you
I need you

I want you
I need you
Can't have you
Things would be the same

Shit dude I will. Thanks

(Part 2/2)

I wish I could change
Earn another chance
Yet you and I remain
Parted staying the same

I want you
I need you
Can't have you
Things would be the same

Bit - ter - sweet
I want you
Can't have you
Things would be the same

>Everyday I see your face
>Orange hair in the breeze
>Now we've grown away
>You're just a memory
I really like this verse. The whole thing felt genuine but this verse has a nice cadence to it even on its own and I think it made it feel good. Same for the chorus on the third and fourth line because it has that extra oomph.

np pham

Somebody please hold me
The world is bleak and lonely
I wake up wishing I was dead
Life is looking very bleak
with just drugs only to tweak
and the shit we call hell inside my head

Well, the pain starts coming and it don't stop coming
Came into life as I became a short coming
Didn't make sense just to carry on
Your life is gray, just be gone.
Nothing to do, nothing to see
So what's wrong with being a sleaze?
Nothing's worth it anymore.
Life's just too much of a chore.

Hey now! You're nothing so far!
Go get a shotgun, okay?
Hey now! You're nothing so far!
Put it to your head, blown 'way!
And all that's sad will stop then
Just hope you will get to live again

It's a sad place
And they say it gets sadder
You're depressed now
You don't really matter
And the suicide hotline is broken
all my problems remain unspoken
The life I live is getting pretty bleak
I look in the mirror but I only see a freak
I wish I was dying
How 'bout you?
Doesn't look like there's a way to get through.

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Hey now! You're nothing so far!
Go get a shotgun, okay?
Hey now! You're nothing so far!
Put it to your head, blown 'way!
And all that's sad will stop then
Just hope you will get to live again

Somebody once asked why do I want it to pass
I want to shoot myself right in the face
And I said no, my life is hollow.
I could really use a razor blade right now
How's there's a god when this is allowed?

Well, the pain starts coming and it don't stop coming!
Came into life as I became a shortcoming!
Didn't make sense just to carry on
Your life is gray, just be gone

Nothing to do, nothing to see
So what's wrong with being a sleaze?
Nothing's worth it anymore!
Life's just too much of a chore!

Hey now! You're nothing so far!
Go get a shotgun, okay?
Hey now! You're nothing so far!
Put it to your head, blown 'way!
And all that's sad will stop then
Just hope you will get to live again

And all that's sad will stop then
Just hope you will get to live again

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