NEETY NEETY YOU THEIVING JEW

>NEETY NEETY YOU THEIVING JEW
>NO MORE WELFARE CHECKS FOR YOU
Good rhythm, these two lines are just fine.

>FUSS AND YELL ALL YOU WANT
>IT WILL BE ALL FOR NAUGHT
The first line of this is really broken, you have it structured so there should be a natural pause following YELL, because there's no way to keep going with it rhythmically without a half pause there.
The second line would be improved if you put the word ALWAYS instead of ALL to avoid the additional pause you need to make for this line to sound clean.
Also WANT and NAUGHT don't rhyme at all.

>ALL THE TENDIES IN YOUR NEETY STASH
>WILL RUN OUT, YOU'LL NEED CASH
The first line in this simply has too many syllables to fit in with the rest of the poem, and the fact that you have a deliberate break in the second line is pretty messy because this is already a carry-over phrase from the previous line that you broke in the middle of the sentence.
You really just gotta redo these two.

>GET A JOB, YOU LAZY SOW
>AND STOP CALLING YOUR MUM A COW
Would be better if you swapped COW and SOW outright, though neither of them make absolute sense because both of these are female identifiers and the NEETs you're on about are almost certainly male.
Line two should be shortened, I suggest replace STOP CALLING with DON'T CALL because that's just better overall.

Anyway like take a C-, I know poetry isn't an important class to you kids anymore but at lest you're trying.

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Better learn something useful than wasting time letting a ape fuck youe hand

I feel like they would learn better if schools focused on English fundamentals and modern applications instead of poetry from 1402.

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Except that welfare/unemployment benefit here in Australia is sacrosanct and no political party on either side could ever do away with it.

So keep crying wagie, I'll be getting my $560 fortnightly payment in 3 days time and there's nothing you can do about it, keep working hard all day to pay for it!

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Leaving cert 6 year
> Lean and Memories poems all year
> ask English teacher why all the poets killed them self's
> Before he reply's
> Say Why are we learning this depressing shit

If my job was being a poet, writing sonnets and other such stuff, I'd neck myself too.

You live in Australia, the government has to give you a check or you'll move to somewhere that isn't a heat blasted shithole with too many abbos.

I Wouldn't want to line in Australia. Country is a fucking death trap

>says the Amerifat who gets no permanent unemployment benefit and will forever be slaving away at McDonalds
lel

I live in Whales you cooked cunt.

>contribute to a shit degenerate society that has given me nothing
No one is entitled to anything buddy boy :^)

..eireat... to you idiot

I'm going to bashed your fucking head in dad if you don't get with the times.

Don't talk about your mom that way wagie. It's not her fault you chose the stupid path in life.